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Message to Readers
I don't know how to end this
Peer Review
Much like you noted, I also love the aesthetic that you presented in this poem. It was delightfully warm and comforting, and I could almost feel myself sitting in the Chinese restaurant as well!
(Just a note: all of these comments are my personal opinion only. As the writer, you have full creative control and you get to decide to what extent you integrate my feedback). To make this (already great) poem even better, could you perhaps add a little bit of sensory description? Not too much, because that would disrupt the wonderful minimalism of the piece, but just enough to suggest the scene - wisps of the scent of a particular dish, the leaking of banging and shouting from the busy kitchen when the door momentarily swings open to let a waiter out. For some inspiration as to how to do "bits" of description very well in order to create a mood, check out the poetry of T.S. Eliot (especially 'Preludes' or 'Rhapsody on a Windy Night.')
Reviewer Comments
Overall, I love this poem! I think you've captured a very small, specific moment, and made it very universal and meaningful for every reader. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading your future writing!