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This was a really great piece that investigated the deep sorrow of someone who has lost a loved one. However, it ended on a really uplifting sense of hope that finalised the piece on a very mature note!
I'd love to know more about Violet herself, as well as what her life with Ernest was like. That way, the reader can have more of an appreciation for why, exactly, his death was so painful for Violet.
Congratulations on writing a really unique and effective story that deals with multiple layers of emotions! It's always very challenging to write about loss, because it's a raw emotion that's difficult to transfer onto the page. If you wanted some more inspiration writing about loss and grief etc. Bridge To Terabithia is a really good example of an ageless, timeless text that deals with death in a very emotional, yet effective way. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more of your future work!