Peer Review by AbigailSauble (United States)

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By: Doktor Habit


FREE WRITING

tw: death implied, detroit: become human, flynn is like 500 years late to a fandom again

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    Destroyed trust and hope ring out in your tone
    An android "abandoned," soon to be on his own
    No longer believing that they gave a damn
    I assure you, these thoughts are errors in your program
    Even now, I feel guilty thinking of that gaze as you died
    Looking me in the eyes, you muttered: "You lied."


Message to Readers

DO NOT COMMENT ON MY PIECES ASKING FOR A SPECIFIC SERIES. I WILL WORK ON IT WHEN I HAVE THE INSPIRATION. I DON'T OWE YOU ANYTHING. BE. PATIENT.
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i still can't poetry


Peer Review

You have good rhythm and rhyme. This is good imagery, but even so I had to read it through a few times to fully understand what you were describing. :)


I think you explain it all well here! Of course, this could be longer, but it's fine as-is. :)


Reviewer Comments

I'm sorry that I didn't write more about this poem, my brain's a little tired right now. ;)
But keep up the good work, and I hope you don't face any writer's block any time soon. :)
God bless!