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I like how the story moves along fast and it kept me hooked, I really want to read more. Also, I like how you put an extra space in between each paragraph, that somehow makes it way easier to read and I read it way faster.
Like I said, this piece is really good, it kept me hooked, the characters are interesting...Maybe you could use some more description on this one...Overall, it was awesome!!!
I enjoyed reading this, like the first one. I'm looking forward to a third chapter, if possible :) Great work again!!!