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There's sadness in it but also stubborn resilience that I can appreciate.
The contrast between youth and adulthood/growing up is very well-done. The organization of the paragraphs is good as well.
The characterization is a little vague, but the emotion is heartfelt and honest.
This draft is pretty clean and well-done! I can feel what you're trying to convey and I can sympathize with the theme of friendships changing as we grow up. Good job so far!
I like the repetition of "Bright, young thing(s)"- it's a nice touch.