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I really feel their surprise when the great swordsman says "Keep your hair on, I'm coming." You used really good description too, I liked it.
I really like how a random snake just came out of nowhere and tried to eat them :) Not sure if there is anything you can add, it was great already, maybe more details about this snake??
Very interesting story! I liked reading this. Great job!!