Peer Review by silene-tomentosa (Australia)()

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Lost

By: AJ - Izzy


FREE WRITING

I am lost. 

This world ignores me.
That world forgets me.
The world reminds me,
every day,
every hour,

that I truly do not belong.

I am lost.

Will you help me?


 


Message to Readers

Will you help me?


Peer Review

I like that this is a short piece with a big meaning.


Perhaps the ending could have been a little different.... "Will you help me?" is a little weak, a stronger ending would have been awesome. For example, you could have ended with "I am lost" and that would've been a really unique and powerful ending, making your poem even more memorable ;)


Reviewer Comments

Nice poem ! :)