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RainAndSonder

United States

poetry and short stories - they/them - harry potter (hufflepuff) - amateur guitarist - the beatles -
music - podcasts (esp night vale)
I drew my profile picture.
What if every song, book, poem, or painting was just a metaphor for food?

Message from Writer

"living in the sprawl / dead shopping malls rise / like mountains beyond mountains," - arcade fire

"sullen eyes, your skies are empty / there's no saving you / life and death between your breath and barely breaking through," - heart attack man

lowercase is intentional.

Maybe Things were Better Before

December 9, 2018

FREE WRITING

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Maybe things were better before.
When the Sun and Planets orbited us,
when stars were glimmering jewels in the sky
and not flaming giants,
when the world was flat
and the sky was open,
when our own realities were enough for us.

Maybe we were happier
before we could think,
when we knew that Earth was flat
without knowing it,
when it came as easily as breathing.

Back then,
we hunted and built
and planted and ran,
and our worlds were only as big as our horizons
and it was enough.

Now we don't wonder if we're small,
we know we are.
We know that we're on a rock
spinning through space around a monstrous fire,
in a solar system in a galaxy in a cluster
in the universe,
one of billions,
one of infinities,
and maybe we weren't meant to
discover that just yet.
Maybe we were too fast for our own good.
I don't know if this makes sense, but I'll publish it anyway. Do you guys know what I'm getting at, and do you have any suggestions as to how to improve it?

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4 Comments
  • Majestically Awkward Manatee

    This piece is awesome. I love how you related it to science. Great job!!!


    6 months ago
  • paperbird

    IKR!!!!


    6 months ago
  • AminahMcBina

    This piece was so...wow! The incorporation of science and how we ma be ahead of ourselves makes this astounding! Well done!

    Again, congrats on winning 2nd place! Which 5 pieces would you like a review on?


    6 months ago
  • Kahte

    I like this a lot. To me it's about how humanity has advanced so far we're conscious of our own existence and that we're trying to find other life forms so we know we're not alone out there? Thanks for commenting on my poem-thing it means a lot to me and makes a big difference.


    6 months ago