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Really loving this. I've been trying to look for a writing piece such as this. You expanded on your thinking fully. You made sure the readers could understand what you are feeling. I love how you consistently included the senses: 'the ringing of some far off bell,' ''it is a pounding worry and sweaty hands,' and 'feeling the rush of safety return.' Most people fail to use the senses, keeping them close in mind. But you used them throughout your piece, and it made the feeling you were trying to convey much more effective.
Honestly, I don't really have anything for you to work on. You used the senses, emotive language, metaphors; the whole lot. Perhaps, if I had to be REALLY picky, I would say use a variety of sentence openers, like frontal adverbials, for an example.
The way you captured a specific moment, a specific feelings, and be able to expand on that feeling and convey it creatively is a true art. You write with such eloquence and you have a very sophisticated way of conveying your point. Keep up the great work!