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Message to Readers
I'd like a genuine feedback dear readers!
I liked the tone, the way you presented your story. It made me feel like I was reading a letter from a dear friend.
December is rough but its still a time of celebration and family. And for you, going home.
I think you could improve the time when you went shopping with your mom. Explain the moment more than explaining it. It would be a great way to make the reader feel that festive feeling.
I was quite satisfied. Though the ending was sad, it was right, it just.... fit! I really liked the ending with a question as well.
You did a great job of sucking me into that enviroment, the country. I felt like I had been there and these were my memories. The personal way in which you wrote it made it even better.