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I love the rhyming, and I love how much meaning you conveyed in this short narrative. The 2nd-person POV is a nice-touch, too!
What do lines 6-8 have to do with the rest of the narrative? What sort of pandemoniums surround the house? What crime? Some imagery about it would be amazing!
This poem makes me imagine a tailor (because of the "blouses") who lives in a dystopia. Why a tailor, though?
There has to be a more relevant title. "Weak" might describe the final line, but is that line meant to have so much emphasis? It doesn't seem like the entire poem hinges on that one line.
For example "Nightmare" might be a better descriptive title. It refers to the crisis AND the sleeping. It's just an example, though.