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I like the conversational tone, but be careful that it doesn't go overboard.
It means time to do whatever you like.
I express my concerns in the highlights to the left.
I do not feel satisfied by the ending. I need more. Concerns are expressed in the highlights.
Hey, keep at it! You like to write in your diary, and now you write on Write the World. :D Keep striving to improve. Also, perhaps talk to those "friends" and your "family"? I hope you find more meaning in life! :D
Sorry for the late response!
One thing that I can't say in any lighter terms is to make sure you know when to indent. When faced with a wall of text, readers will feel intimidated!
There are some places where you have a lot of extra spaces (from pressing the space bar). Please look over those and fix them!