Peer Review by CreativeAngel (United States of America)()

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Notice Me

By: Mangolover


FREE WRITING

Notice me.
Please.
I don't want to disappear anymore.
I want to be noticed.
I want to be someone.
I'm tired of being the kid who sits alone,
lonely.

I don't want to be judged by my appearance anymore,
the way you all stop and stare.
It really hurts.
This world is really a cruel place,
we live to gain, 
we cry to lose.
We always want more, never having enough.
Why can't we appreciate for once?
Why can't I be appreciated for once?

My appearance shouldn't define me,
for I am simply hiding behind a face.
I sit there longingly,
but you judge me for being distorted.
Distorted in a way that makes me different,
and as you call it,
'the weird kid'.

I feel desperate to just be noticed.
I feel desperate for you to just look my way.
On the inside, I cry,
but you won't know,
for I sit

unnoticed.






 


Message to Readers

:)


Peer Review

The way I relate to this so much is scary and just it called out to me as if “come, see the legendary piece”


Maybe deepen it to an experience? I don’t know really but describe what happened as a child how you were loved at birth and cute and everyone only saw you but then you fade away as you grow.


Reviewer Comments

Overall beautiful piece and I enjoyed it ! :D