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Message to Readers
I don't celebrate Christmas, and my goal is not to offend anyone with this piece. I just want to express how I feel about December.
Peer Review
I most enjoyed the counting done in the latter half of the piece. It certainly illustrates the extent to which the author likes December—down to each second. I believe that the description that followed each number could be expanded with imagery to be more endearing.
December is the taste of wind as it tousles your hair and bites your tongue with its own merry breath.
I think the set up could be done better. While you list some casual descriptions of the mountains and dew and wind, it wasn't enough, and it wasn't unique. Many of what you've written describes what December is to you, but why is it unique to just you? This is where detailed, precise description comes in handy.
What sorts of trees are there? What are the people in your community like during the winter? What are some activities that you do in December—because of the snow or the atmosphere? What is an interesting thing that has happened to you in December? WHY does your December matter to you?
I.e. I hate the freezing cold and ice and snow, so describing those things in your piece doesn't make me feel at home. Instead, describe your traditions (religious or not) and feelings and family and fun. Describe your unique experiences that make me relate and connect. Make your readers feel at home, or at least, make them see YOUR home.
I wished their were more people involved. We don't need any action scenes or dialogue, but I wish references to other people existed. Did anyone make your December very happy or festive? Who were they, and why did they do it? I feel like including more experiences would've created a more satisfying ending.
I gave you a lot of criticism, but I do appreciate your story and writing as a reader and as a writer. You have good storytelling skills, and if you improved on craft (better descriptions, better sentence flow), you'll be able to forge stellar pieces in the future.
Keep doing what you're doing, and don't give up. I like spending my time editing for other people because I know that they want to improve, and they want feedback. :)
Reviewer Comments
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