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"One day, they shall inherit the earth, as was their birthright." It stood out so much for me because well, firstly, it doesn't go with the flow of the poem, it seemed so out of place when I first read it.
I imagined an orchestra playing but wit just one flute way back at the end, so I think you really put across your point perfectly, good job!
Its kind of fascinating how you chose the flute, in this fast moving- EDM loving generation, the flute has truly lost its importance, so what really was your inspiration?
I think its wonderful hoe efficiently you have personified the instrument, calling it shy and all. good job!