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Message to Readers
I really liked how you didn't represent 'first rays' as the start of something good that can never worsen, your unique take on the idea was fresh and interesting to read!
I would like a deeper insight into the 'nightmares and shadows'. Perhaps you could align them with some sort of metaphor to really make your writing shine. Your choice, though, of course!
Thank you so much for participating in my contest, this piece was a pleasure to read! I'll be looking forward to more from you!