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Message to Readers
this one's for all of you rock'n'rollers; all you crash queens and motor babies
THE. IMAGERY. It was beautifully well written, you should be very proud! I get some HEAVY Mad Max vibes when reading this ;)
I would like if you could deepen the theme of first ray throughout your piece. I get that this wasn't written exclusively for my contest, and unfortunately it shows in that regard. Still, this is definetly some high quality work!
Thank you so much for entering my contest, and for writing this!