Peer Review by Early Pearl (United States)

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by any name

By: Surly Wombat


FREE WRITING

something flying
something free
perfect endings
call to me

dance into the fire
dip into the light
taste the ash in the air
what a brilliant plight

crimson stains
dripping tears
a silver dagger
forged with fears

dragged into the deep
quick to sink
swirling waters
drowned in a blink

tainted fame
death comes in many forms
a rose by any name
has bloody thorns
 


Message to Readers

that was morbid but i'm really proud of it


Peer Review

WHOA. I don’t usually do really dark stuff (writing or reading, except Edgar Allan Poe) but holy cow this piece. It really draws you in and the ending gives you such a shock.


This piece doesn’t need anything else! I think if you add things it would ruin the flow and the general beauty of it.


Reviewer Comments

This was your prize review from my contest forever ago. Apparently I’m really bad at time management, lol. I thought that dance you entered a poem, I would review a poem. :) Amazing job on this piece!