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give me feedback! is this too graphic for this platform? too gross? or not enough? can i add phlegm and pus and other bodily fluids to the equation? (kidding, kidding)
it makes me wonder what is going on till the very end when you put in the last piece in tying it all together.
It doesn't specifically remind me or make me think of remus lupin until I read the comments box.
Over all a pleasing story to read because of the way you tie it together at the end.