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I really enjoyed the repetition of the noun cadence as it gave the entire piece a lyrical, musical tone. The anaphoric 'I may.....I may' alongside the paired ending 'path' is also rhythmic and backs the notion of the individuals own beat. The line 'The road is mine to make' strikes a chord with readers, I think, after the enjambment after 'path' so this works beautifully. The natural imagery of trees gave me shivers and is almost like a heartbeat where it 'booms'.
A small detail may be to make a stanza of the last line to replicate the stanza of the first line. With respect to freedom, I enjoy the blank verse but possibly trying similar sentiment in a formed poem like a ballad or even a continued rhyme scheme might be a cool idea to play with.
Dead Poets Society is fucking great.