Fernweh

India

On a quest to find myself.
Music lover.
Dark Chocoholic.
Daydreamer.
Intellectual.
Thinker.
Bookworm.
Atheist.
Writer.
Poetess.

Message to Readers

I usually write poems so, I would like to receive feedbacks on my poem-writing skills and also on my expression of words. Thank you so much for reading!

A Mother's Joy

November 14, 2019

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A gift from heavens was bestowed upon her,
A line of immense gratitude was on her face as the little angel began to stir.
With great care, she clutched her bundle of joy close to her soul,
As she realized, that the little one had made her life complete to the whole.

Eyes made of innocence, heart composed of gold,
It was the greatest delight, any mother could ever hold.
Hands that wanted protection, soul that cried for adore,
Its cuteness was such that no one could ignore.

Even its little squeals of enthrall brought clusters of pleasure to her,
Even a little pain to it made her tears occur.
Its arrival had made her home, a garden of bliss,
With every worry, tension and sadness to dismiss.

It was a joy for hers to keep forever,
But has time stopped for anyone ever?
Up the little angel grew, too large for her to caress.
To go out in the huge world and achieve numerous success.

While it spent its days working and making its life,
She just wished to cherish those memories of past in more rife.
While her gift from god eventually forgot her and engaged in its life to be eminent and to soar,
She sat back dying with her hands aching for those moments to be hers once more.
My first published work at Write The World. Hope you awesome writers like it!

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16 Comments
  • Fernweh

    Thanks Some_Stand_Up_For_The_Vanquished....
    This is my first here on WtW...
    Otherwise..I have also written some terrible poetry before!


    about 22 hours ago
  • Some_Stand_Up_For_The_Vanquished

    REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
    thats amazing!!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAA
    this was your first??????
    mine was TERRIBLE! YOURE AMAZING


    about 22 hours ago
  • Riley Noel

    This is an absolutely wonderful piece about the joys of motherhood. I love how you use such descriptive language to really bring each line to life. Beautiful job!


    10 months ago
  • Christy Wisdom

    I absolutely love this poem, and can't believe I haven't seen/liked/commented on it earlier! I'm so happy that you decided to write about this. I help out in the nursery at my church, and I know that the dear infants of this world deserve to be loved as much as you portrayed in this poem. The imagery is beautiful, and I love how it focuses on the mother so much.


    10 months ago
  • Quille

    How could I help but like something this good? :DD


    10 months ago
  • Fernweh

    Thank you so much mrcolinredwards, Quille and Paperbird for liking it..^_^


    10 months ago
  • mrcolinredwards

    Aww,so sad and sweet at the same time!!!


    10 months ago
  • Quille

    Oh wow!!!!!!!!! This is fantastic. Not only the descriptions and wording, but the emotion is mind-blowing! :DD I love this piece :DD
    Thank you for coming to WtW! :DDD


    10 months ago
  • paperbird

    this is honestly amazing... i love every part of it. great wording, great descriptions.


    10 months ago
  • Fernweh

    I am neither a mother nor have I ever seen a newborn...This idea just came out of nowhere to me one day. Thank You so much StripedFly1001 for your comment.

    P.S. I am waiting for the review.


    12 months ago
  • janice

    I can remember when my nephew was a newborn... this piece really got to me. It's so realistic and beautiful. If you did this without having seen a newborn child before, then you are absolutely amazing. Great job!


    12 months ago
  • Fernweh

    Thank you sooo much Made4Love!


    12 months ago
  • Made4Love

    Welcome to WtW!
    This piece is so lovely! And I liked the rhyme:)


    12 months ago
  • Fernweh

    Thank you so much Johanna and Mary Wall for commenting on my first post at WtW and yes, YES, I am loving here at WtW.....


    12 months ago
  • Johanna

    This is indeed beautiful... Welcome to Write the World! Hope you're liking it so far ;)


    12 months ago
  • Mary Wall

    This is beautiful! Good job!


    12 months ago