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I don't think this is well written, definitely not one of my best pieces but it's been quite a while since I've written. I realized that if I didn't publish this I probably couldn't publish anything cause it wasn't well written or didn't flow well etc etc..
Feedback is welcome and greatly appreciated. let me know what you think alright :)
It is nice that the emotional situation could apply to a number of different situations, all of would be relatable to the reader. However, I feel that the ending was fairly predictable, and if you're interested, have a twist of being much darker.
Clearly, there's potential to look at specifically what the situation the character is in, but I'm assuming you're looking to keep it as generic and applicable as possible. Maybe also include some details of the setting to add an element of pathetic fallacy to the emotions.
In general, you have the structure of the whirlwind of thoughts that the character is having, but I feel that you really need to add some detailed physical description to accompany each emotion.
As you pointed out, it is a first draft, and there are a couple places that I've pointed out that I feel once gone over a second read through, could really help improve the overall flow of the piece.