Peer Review by inkyscribbles (United States)

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Eyes

By: Christy Wisdom


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Look into my eyes, she
Said to him.
What do you see?

Do you see 
Regrets,
Fear, 
Ruthlessness,
Hatred?

Do you see
Depression,
Sadness,
Emptiness, 
No hope?

Maybe emotions are not seen, 
Perhaps you see
Color.

Brown, like dirt.
Spiked rims, like ebony.
Black, like a pit.

And he replied,
I see...

I see a 
Fire, an
Imagination, 
A
Home.

I see
Intelligence,
Happiness,
Love,
Warmth.

I do see color.
Black, like the beautiful night.
Brown, like chocolate.
And spilled coffee rims.

He grinned, she
Smiled.
He had seen.
Will you marry me,
He asked.
She said
Yes.


Message to Readers

This is an interesting piece. Do you like how it came out? I hope it wasn't confusing, lol. I don't quite know what I've got here. Does it even make any sense?


Peer Review

I just love how beautiful it is, it’s hard to write poetry but you do it really well.


Absolutely no more is needed! You nailed it! The ending just makes your heart content and ready for your own life.


Reviewer Comments

My favorite part is I see a fire an imagination a home. Knowing this is a love story that’s just the sweetest thing to be said to a woman. ❤️