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Another greek & latin roots story project thing
I found this to be a very well-written and beautiful piece! I'm curious as to the significance of the emboldened words - did this project oblige you to use certain words in a story?
(Just a disclaimer: all of this is just my personal opinion as a reviewer. As the writer, you have full creative control over your piece, and it's up to you to what extent you implement my feedback) Although I did love the simplicity of this piece, could you perhaps deepen the story and characterisation by providing a tiny bit more backstory or context? Maybe branch out this plot of the sister's malaria? Or perhaps provide more information about their father?
Overall, well done writing an expressive, unique story! I'd encourage you to expand on this very solid foundation by providing a little more detail, characteriation and plot, but at the end of the day, you've done a very good job. I especially enjoyed the lyrical moments of description of the music. Keep up the great work, and I look forward to reading more of your writing in the future!