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This is a perspective that I've never written from before. How well did I do?
I liked how you used religion in your piece in a fresh and original way, I found the "battle" element to it really interesting!
If I could amend anything, I would add more of a "first ray" theme to your writing. I get that the light bolts represent rays, but with a bit of tweaking you can bring out the message even more smoothly :)
Thank you for taking part in my contest, and for writing this!