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How does this strike you? Is it confusing, or did I do OK?

Argument#ICBYShortStory

November 18, 2018

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    "I can't believe you! Not after you lied to me so many times!"
    "I wasn't lying, I was -- giving you truth you could handle."
    "NO, you were lying, and it's killed us.  You knew we were falling apart.  And you just kept shutting me up, saying, 'no, it's fine, it's not cancer, it can't possibly be cancer, you're just imagining things.'  And you killed us."
    She listened to the argument of herself with herself.  It raged on, a self-destructive storm.
    "I should have listened to myself," she said aloud at last.

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5 Comments
  • AminahMcBina

    Hey! Thanks for entering my contest, your piece was wonderful!

    Every contestant plays a role in the surprise story!!


    over 1 year ago
  • Quille

    O.K. Dudette, the third chapter is very short, but it's up. Chapter four will appear tomorrow :)


    over 1 year ago
  • AminahMcBina

    Wow, this piece was very interesting. I want to point out the small mistake, "...and it's killed us." I think you meant, "and it killed us." Otherwise, well done! I do indeed love this, and the complexity adds even more!

    Well done! And thanks for entering the contest!

    Good luck!
    -Mina


    over 1 year ago
  • Silver Pen

    It's dudette. At least, so says my dad, and I think he might be on to something.
    Thanks!:)


    over 1 year ago
  • Quille

    This is pretty good, dude :D Nice argument :)


    over 1 year ago