Peer Review by Aarushikrishnan (United States)

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The Ocean and his lover #firstraycontest

By: purplepanache


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An ocean roared past my bed
The other morning
Just as the first ray
Of light trembled in
I thought they would have a brawl
But she simply made
His pale skin glisten
A tranquil azure.
 
He even looked
Beautiful.
 
I think she loves him
For everyday
She shatters herself into a million pieces
Only so that she could linger in his embrace.

Find the link to Aarushi's contest here: https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/87667/version/167427

Peer Review

I love the simple, almost minimalistic writing style you have, it gives your writing an ethereal quality.


I like it like this, as a very short, sweet poem. I don't think you need any further details, it's lovely as it is.


Reviewer Comments

Thank you so much for entering my contest, I look forwards to reading more from you!