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I love the imagery in this story. It really draws me into the story and makes me want to know more. I also love how you've built on the character's personality throughout the story. It makes me want to know more about the boy and his life.
I think your ability to create characters is incredible. I honestly do not know how to make your character any better. The only thing that I would suggest is a little more description on his actual appearance as I felt like I didn't have a clear vision on what he looked like.
I don't think I have anything for this. I would like a little extra information on the funeral and the actual accident. It seems short - but then again, accidents are short. So, don't stress about changing anything in this area.
Yes! I can get a clear image of what each scene is like. I would like some more sensory details in the scene of the accident. That would make it seem all the more real - which would work well for the emotional appeal of the scene!
First of all, I am amazed at your talent in writing. I love your ability to make words flow and create scenes in another person's mind. I aspire to write like you. If you ever publish, let me know and I'll buy a copy!!
I love this! Looking forward to see what else you can do.