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I love this writing technique. You are amazing at imagery and using emotion to make readers want to read more. I particularly loved phrases such as "in a constant state of atrophy" and "with stress-induced acne and the most unsightly weight gain."
I would love a second part to this writing. Or maybe a piece of writing on why, or how they think they feel that way. Maybe talk about the people around them or reflect on who you used to be.
I love this piece!! Please keep writing, we need more writers like you.