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The imagery was fantastic, especially the way the clouds are described. I also really liked how there was a feeling of apprehension that came from the nature "facing the moon." Brilliant!
I had to read it a few times to come to the conclusion that the nature did not like the moon, because of how the sun was introduced. I really enjoyed seeing both aspects, but I think some sort of contrast between the two could be good, because I am not sure if I came to the conclusions you wanted.
Your imagery was astounding! I'm not sure if I came to the conclusions you wanted, but this was a wonderful piece and you should be very proud!