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The nicknames part really intrigues me, how the most popular gets their name and the how you got nicknames and some people couldn't really remember it. I totally get it but it confuses me, thanks for adding that!
I would love to know more about where your last name comes from. Maybe just a bit more detail for the middle name part as well. But it was really good apart from that.
In all it was a great piece, nice and short so the reader didn't lose focus.