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Working really hard on characters, transition, and consistency. I need your help!!
Its about a girl, whose parents have just been murdered, when she finds a letter: from yhe murderer to her.
The description. It builds up tension.
"With every word my stomach cramps harder and the screams in my brain are amplified." This lets me see into the character's mind and learn how she feels about this whole ordeal. It builds a better connection and understanding of the character.
It is a depressing tone. It made me feel upset, sad and depressed.
I feel angry at the murderer and at the writer for leaving the story at such a critical point!
If this was a book then I would definatly buy it just to know the conclusion of the mystery.