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Let me know if my pacing was alright, please! I want the transitions to be smooth and detailed but I'm nervous that it wasn't as smooth or as detailed as I wanted it. This is kind of an excerpt of a work-in-progress but I've edited it a lot. I hope you all enjoy!
The fact that he is actually on a ship and that perhaps he is a criminal.
I would like to know who he is, what he is doing there and what he has done to end up there. Also who the people holding him hostage are.
I think it was great. It was suspensful and gripping and I couldn't stop reading. Do not worry about your transitions they were great. It was an incredibaly detailed piece. I really enjoyed it! Keep going!