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What's next? Huh?
I'm not exactly sure, to be honest...
But I guess, I would say that this is about an anonymous 'savior'?
It's not exactly clear.
The spoken words. I know that there isn't a whole lot of that in here, but ... it was really the only part that I could completely understand.
The first sentence. I picture them to be under a bridge maybe, at night, in a cityscape. But really, I'm still a little perplexed. ;)
Dark, frantic. You could really improve the mood, though, if you use more describing words, and clear up the scene a little bit. :)
Honestly...I'm a little confused. It was really hard to picture the scene. This has, however, a ton of potential. Just try to clear it up a bit and describe it better. :)
Great job! Keep going!!