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For one thing, this isn't exactly a myth. (While it may be fiction) The supernatural word is definitely alive and (maybe not so well, but alive nonetheless).
And I absolutely LOVE your POV. I'd never thought before about how Death can hear people's heartbeats, and that would also bug me if I could, too. All different rhythms. ;)
You don't have all that much symbolism (though if I missed it, I apologize), but man.....this piece deserves a lot of viewing/likes/comments/reviews!!
You began with a captivating sentence, and it just grew in interesting(ness) from there! And at the end, we see Death turning a soft corner. Sparing a newborn? Aww.....can something get any sweeter? :)
Oh my goodness........I love this SOOO much!
Keep up the fantastic work!!