Peer Review by jaden forbush (United States)

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The last day

By: David Gudjonsson


On the last day of the world I'd be paralyzed; unable to do anything. If I could even stand up I would try to reconnect with people long since past. If that would even be possible I would finally be able to reconcile with the fact we are all going to die. Good bye old friends, goodbye new freinds, goodbye world.   


Message to Readers

Please tell me how I could add more detail to my writing.


Peer Review

The fact that you would try to make amends with people from the past, before it's to late.


I'm left with the feeling that you would rather accept the fact that the World is ending as opposed to falling in a state of panic.


Reviewer Comments

I don't find anything wrong with your statement about the end of the world. I also feel like you might be speaking from the heart.