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oof exactly 1000 words - anyway i'm super proud of this so please like/comment/review <3
I think the last line, and the line where she says, "it reminds me. god..." Because these suspenseful moments makes me want to know more. What's going to happen next?
I think speaking in first person, always make the person feel alive. I'd like to know more about the characters past.
The scene where she talks about her prosthetic leg. I'd like to know what happened.
In a magical land filled with prodigious characters, maybe.
This was absolutely amazing. You're a very good writer, and id love to see a part 2!
Always write free,