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I need help with setting. Please
The immediate nervousness of Alice, and the intensity of Mrs. Blois.
Her glowing exuberance at teaching the children the wonders of "elephant toothpaste". She just lit up, a mysterious and beautiful school teacher in a lab coat.
The scene of the actual elephant toothpaste making. I think an introduction of some sort should be in place, to give a clearer image of the purpose of making the toothpaste and when it is being made, after the interview or before.
It seems pretty clearly to be happening in a school, and there isn't much to add to the school setting that is already there.
I love Alice! you crafted her beautifully, and you definitely have a knack for descriptions.
I know you said to help with the setting, but I can't really find much wrong with it. Other than the time issues, everything seemed to lay out pretty clear. Good work!