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This was really sweet... A bit more mundane compared to your other ROY G BIV pieces, but I think it was greatly needed. You need to appreciate the little things in life, y'know? And Bleu and Indie's interactions are so adorable.
Hm... I think it's good as is? Maybe add more of Indie's inner thoughts to answer why they wanted to hang out with Bleu, and whether they were nervous about knocking on Bleu's door.
These characters have a special place in my heart. This was such a sweet, pure installment. This was a review of the MyFormOfWriting Competition way back when, sorry it took me so long to review!