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A young lady (assumed) who is being transported somewhere and doesn’t know exactly what’s going to happen to her.
How clearly the writer is able to draw out the setting through her words. You can almost see the tear rolling down her cheek, her forehead pressed against the window as her parents fade from view.
“That was the question that remained in my head as the rain began pattering on my window”
This piece just gives a dark and forlorn mood that makes you want to reach out to the narrator.
I feel very grateful that I have my parents and I begin to think about what others may go through and what I should do about it.
Stunning work, keep writing to change the world