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I rested my head up against the train window and watched the train station slowly disappeared out of veiw. A single tear rolled down my cheek as I watched my parents fade with the station. I knew where I was going. I knew my fate. Nothing could change that. I was going to die. But would I die putting up a fight, or would I die curled up in a ball of submission? That was the question that lingered in my head as the rain began pattering on my window.

This might be extended into a full story but I’m not sure yet. The title won’t remain the same, though. Can anyone guess what the time period is? I didn’t give much clues bc it was short but tell me your ideas in the comments, thanks!

Peer Review

If you were to tell a friend what this piece is about, what would you say?

A young lady (assumed) who is being transported somewhere and doesn’t know exactly what’s going to happen to her.

What’s the biggest strength of this piece?

How clearly the writer is able to draw out the setting through her words. You can almost see the tear rolling down her cheek, her forehead pressed against the window as her parents fade from view.

Which sentences or lines do you think were particularly strong in voice or point of view?

“That was the question that remained in my head as the rain began pattering on my window”

How would you describe the tone of this piece? What mood does the writer create through his/her choice of language and rhythm?

This piece just gives a dark and forlorn mood that makes you want to reach out to the narrator.

What idea or feeling are you left with at the very end of this piece? What do you walk away with?

I feel very grateful that I have my parents and I begin to think about what others may go through and what I should do about it.

Reviewer Comments

Stunning work, keep writing to change the world