Below, you'll see any text that was highlighted with comments from the reviewer.
What's striking about this example is that it doesn't need to be taking literally. This can be an analogy for a variety of things: Trying something for the first time, charging at something you've been avoiding, etc.
I would like to read more analogies! If each analogy is explained to its extent with twists and turns that the reader can't predict, it can be a very interesting read.
2nd Review of the Corner Writing Club's December Reviewing Assignments. :)