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I feel like out of all your poems I've read until now, this one was the most ambiguous- I'm left feeling the emotions you wanted me to feel, but I don't know what prompted you to write it. I absolutely adore that, it gives your poem an ethereal quality.
There seems to be a bit of a disjoint between the second and third stanzas of your poem. I recommend adding a bridge stanza, I feel like that would really make it pop!
I really don't have to say it, you know I'm your biggest fan. This was delightful, as always.
Also, I love your title, it feels almost morbidly whimsical, which suits the poem itself wonderfully!