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I actually wrote this poem out a few months ago, but I never really got around to putting it here. I've made a few changes to fit WTW's format, so it's not the original version. Please tell me which parts you liked and which parts you think could be improved! Thank you!
The ending really got me. It made me understand the entire point of the poem, which didn't make sense at first. The way that this was played out was expertly done. Great job.
I want to emphasize the point I made on the last highlight---be sure to tie in the rest of the poem with more lines. I also think there's something to be added in the third stanza. You could even add a different forth stanza with this added detail: Along with talking about their weaved emotions, you should add more elements to describing a human's life---color, faces, thoughts, etc. I really like the way that this was done, but it doesn't quite capture everything that humans are.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. The ending was powerful and it made the entire poem shine. Aside form the highlighted bits and critiques in the question above, this poem is really perfect and masterfully crafted. Great work and keep writing!