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more sapphic bullshit help me write actual fiction pls
the beauty of moving on is represented so well here and so is the concept of love as a whole. my gay heart couldn't deal with all the detail and softness and love for women
i think you could go further into the effect left on you by the girl with the butterfly tattoo. it's very subtle right now, which works well, but if you wanted you could drop a few more details (they would also have to be v subtle though because the subtlety and simplicity is what makes it so powerful)
some of the highlighted phrases have more than one highlighted comment on them so be aware of that when reading the highlights. this is beautiful and it p much gave you the key to my heart