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angels made of neon and...actually scratch that it's just neon
I loved the first sense the most- visual. The way you described it almost made me feel like I was standing there watching this macabre tale unfold. Impressive!
The subtle imagery you used helps enormously with picturing your writing. Referencing sensory inputs like color, background noise, and so on gives total immersion, which you are clearly very good at!
This was gruesomely beautiful to read. I completely loved it, and each sentence I read kept me asking, and kept me reading. Very well done, this is a remarkable piece!