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how would you interpret this piece?

it's clear #anhacontest

October 11, 2018

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the raindrops are clear,
pure, before they hit the ground.

clear, like a child's love for his parents
clear, like the unconcealed hurt in his eyes
clear, like the water flowing between the rocks
clear, like the undiluted feelings we have.

then it hits the ground
soaking in its impure essence
every particle infiltrating its very being
 
it becomes dirty, impure.

impure, like the scary depths of his mind.
impure, like the uncontrollable power he hunts for.
impure, like the filth we gift the rivers each day.
impure,

how fast our feelings change,
harming us and those we love

forever.

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5 Comments
  • Araw

    Read this before, and it's just as good the second time around.


    17 days ago
  • ryxxry

    hey I started the review for this piece, so it will be in soon. Also, the next update for The Beginning of The End will be in soon. I'm working on it now and hope to post it the Wednesday after Thanksgiving. I am glad you like it too.


    21 days ago
  • Anha

    I love how you've applied rain to this prompt! It's been raining for a few days where I am, so this really resonates with me. Well done!


    2 months ago
  • fatpanda

    thank you so much! I hope you're alright :)


    2 months ago
  • ~Kate T

    I love the descriptions here! It's actually raining here right now because of hurricane Michael (we aren't in the direct path of the storm, we're just getting hit with a ton of rain) and I really enjoyed how you were able to capture the essence of raindrops with use of repetition and a metaphor at the end.


    2 months ago