Peer Review by Aarushikrishnan (United States)

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Haiku

By: HeyThereRose


FREE WRITING

The sky is pure fire
as light as last night was dark
my fears now painted pale pink

as the sun rises
I take a tiny step forwards 
Into the new day

 


Message to Readers

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Peer Review

This was beautiful! When it comes to imagery you have a gift, and your word choice was clean as well.


I would like to know what prompted you to make a poem out of two different haiku. It makes a gorgeous effect, I really like it!


Reviewer Comments

This was a very elegant poem that spoke multitudes. At a few places you didn't stick to the traditional haiku syllable count (5-7-5), and I'm not sure if it was intentional or not, but it gave it a very avant-garde style. Keep up the good work!