Peer Review by annacatherine (Australia)

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at first sight

By: Anha


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two years ago, my english teacher asked my class if we believed in love at first sight.

some said yes.

some said no.

the cynic i was, i proclaimed the latter.

then she asked us if we believed in lust at first sight.

and speaking to a room full of young women, she already knew the answer.

how could we not?


Message to Readers

Thinking of extending on this somehow. Thoughts?


Peer Review

I love how this piece is so simple but has impact and meaning behind it. I love how you twisted the conversation from love to lust so cleverly.


I would love it if you could expand on this idea and make it a longer poem :) maybe by saying why you didn't believe in love but believed in lust!


Reviewer Comments

Overall this was really good :)