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You have an amazing emotional range! The way you conveyed what you felt and how isolated you felt really made me sympathize and connect with you, and that is a wonderful talent to have.
As I mentioned in the highlights, I feel that writing a few more lines on what exactly the change was and how you went about doing it would help greatly.
Your reflection part of the brief was very well executed. However, adding a few more scenes of what you felt (perhaps with your family members) can only help!
I LOVED the ending! It was flawlessly put down, no changes needed!
At the age of 14, you have astonishing writing potential. You have all my respect and appreciation :)
An essay this great deserves a phenomenal title. While your current heading IS very good, I feel that it can be improved. How do you feel about "The Tides of Change"?