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this piece, despite being set in a dystopia, is very real. it dabbles in topics that are in conversation today (not enough, in my opinion), and that are pressing issues that need to be addressed. i think you handled it with style, and it makes for an engrossing and entertaining read
a lot of the first half is introducing the setting, which is completely necessary, but also makes it a bit difficult for the reader to get into the rhythm of the piece. you have so much good material here! if you made it longer, there are so many bits of this universe that you could explore and describe
one thing that i've noticed about your writing is that you don't pull punches. you write what you want to write and you write it how you want to write it. i really respect you for that.